DotP Alternate Lyric Suggestions

[PetFriendAmy]

PFA, lurker extraordinaire, pops in for comments!

Okay, so I'm going against the crowd here, but I don't really like "tarnished" instead of "tainted." And it could just be that the current lyrics are embedded in my brain, but "forever tarnished, thanks to you" just doesn't flow very well in my mind. I don't really know how to describe it, but it doesn't feel like it fits IMO.

I wasn't around for the "hook, line, sinker" debate, but yeah, it's probably better to leave that alone. XD;

I definitely agree that the "fulfill my duty" line sounded rather awkward, with the emphasis on that last syllable and all, but I'm not sure I like the change much better. It's probably because there would be some unnatural emphasis on "by," which, well... sounds weird. Adding "decree" into the song sounds like a good idea though, so maybe it could be phrased a bit differently, so it doesn't put emphasis on random prepositions?

Beyond that, the changes are fine with me. I really like the "curse of the prosecutor" line being changed to a question--it sounds a lot more contemplative, which fits the mood rather well, I think.


By the way, does this mean the songs are open for lyric changes now? >_> <_<

[U. Papaeyra]

If I may say something... I agree with Officer on the "hook, line, sinker" thing. I've heard that phrase many times, and many of the people watching the musical may recognize it as a saying.

As compromise...

When I sing the song, I tend to sing it as 'hook, line and sinker' to each beat. Maybe you could do it here...?

[Kartoon Kween]

Omg you guys, I wasn't expecting all this feedback. Sorry I haven't been around in a while, I've been working on other projects.

Looking back, I'm gonna hafta concede that a few of my suggestions didn't flow as well as they should have. Like, "I will still live by this decree" sounds a lot better than "I will still live by my decree." It's just not good to have "by" and "my" together like that. Anyway, I hope that we can all work together and make every song as good as they can possibly be! Like with all shows, little changes to the songs and script are always being made, right until the last moment, and then even after the show has been running for a while. I mean, the song "The Phantom of the Opera" has several different versions, each with different lyrics.

[Pleading Eyes]

Using some suggestions from here (Thanks Kween!), some form other places (Planky <3), and some of the original lyrics, I drafted the final version of Decree (so long as Tri approves it). Tell me what you think!

EDGEWORTH:
What can I say? All the signs point to the truth.
My perfect guilty record--forever tainted, thanks to you.
This court is meant to stop the ones who bring darkness to the light.
It's natural--no miracle--for this court to make it...

[spoken]
Wright, you listen to me These lingering doubts you've burdened me with serve no useful purpose. Don't ever show your face to me again. That's what I came here to say.

[sung]
Guilty of blaming an innocent man... is that the curse of the prosecutor?
Before I faced him, I won every case, but now I have been shamed and disgraced.
Vasquez was framing an innocent man. I took the bait; hook, line, sinker.
I was relentless in playing my cards, when and where did it all fall apart?

After Wright sauntered in with that grin on his face,
though he bluffed the whole time, somehow he won the case!
And it pains me how one man so new to the law
can incense me so much that it breaks my resolve...
But I know... yes, I know...

Even though I've fallen, I'll rise again.
I admit that I've made mistakes.
A new day will soon begin, and I swear that I will win,
Yes, I'll do whatever it takes!
Staunchly, I'll ascend to the top again.
I won't let another go free.
I know this is not the end, I feel a new fire within:
A personal renaissance in me!

Every criminal earns his punishment!
So I've always done all I could.
What's the harm in filling in the blanks, to some extent,
if it's for the greater good?

[spoken]
Indeed. If the defendant is clearly guilty, then my methods--however extreme--should not be an issue at all: it's my civic duty. But...is that my true motivation? Or do I do it for myself as well? Either way, no matter how many cases I win...it won't change the past.

[sung]
One lingering thought fills my mind, burdening me with anxiety:
"Have I, indeed, been so blinded with pretentious piety?
For if I cheat in the courts, can I say with a straight face
that I'm a better man than the sorts whom I prosecute every case?"

[Spoken]
But no one should go through what I've been through...ever. Therefore, it's my role, my obligation, my responsibility to condemn.

Frankly, some may doubt cases I have won.
I will still live by my decree:
That I'll do what must be done, to capture the wicked ones,
For this is demanded of me.

I have gone above and beyond, at times
Justice requires the extra mile!
I sense Wright thinks I am blind. If I peered into his mind,
then I'D be the one who is on trial!

[spoken rhythmically]
Wright, you fool! Can't you understand, I'm not a monster, I'm just a man!
Despite my objections and my commands, that crime shall pay is my only demand!
And while you search for contradictions, thinking I just want convictions,
you can't comprehend just why I take my stand!

I fight for truth! I fight for justice,
So that all families can safely sleep at night.
To stop criminalization, I pursue incarceration. For security,
I'll fight you until your spirit breaks!
I'll fight, no matter what is at stake!
Not fame! Not glory! But this courtroom purgatory
is the reason I fight...

And we'll meet again, Phoenix Wright!

[Kartoon Kween]

I like it! My only suggestion would be to change the lyric "I will still live by my decree" to "I will still live by this decree" (the reason being simply that I think the second one would be easier to sing).

Sooo... what other songs need some work? I personally think we should go over all the songs with a fine-toothed comb. Gotta make this musical as good as we can make it... you know, on the off-chance that Capcom decides to pick it up!

It's never foolish to dream big.

[Ameera]

If you want to have ideas for other songs I love Tomorrow's Trial but I think that "Tomorrow this nightmare will end" shouldn't be Phoenix's line and should be Edgeworth's considering he always mentions his "nightmare." Also (No, I'm not trying to just give Edgey lines, I swear.) I think Phoenix's line "My final performance" could be changed to Edgeworth's again because Phoenix doesn't think this is gonna be his "final performance" but Edgeworth does. That's all I really think I just thought it was weird to start that song off with Edgeworth and then he just kinda stops talking (for once ) in the middle. Tell me what you think!